Noting that site member
FromOtherWorld (W: 5 days, S: 1 days, ID: 10145323) recently posted an idea thread that contains indicators of AI-generation: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-17458833/idea-critique:keter-the-conditional-benefactor-hostage-proto
Hello everyone! π
I'm a new writer here, and this is my first SCP idea submission for critique. I've been a big fan of the SCP Foundation for a while now, and I finally decided to try creating my own.
This concept revolves around SCP-XXXX, "The Conditional Benefactor," a highly intelligent, Keter-class entity that grants wishes not for magic, but through near-omniscient scientific knowledge, with the goal of observing the moral corruption of the host. Containment is managed through a hostile, psychological truce (Hostage Protocol).
I'm particularly looking for feedback on:
The Keter Management/Hostage Protocol: Does the "host rotation" idea feel plausible for a high-level threat?
The Tone: Does the entity's arrogant, bureaucratic dialogue (seen in the Interview Log) fit the clinical SCP style?
If the idea isn't quite working, I'm completely open to scrapping it and starting over! Any and all feedback is appreciated.
Thank you!
TITLE: SCP-XXXX - The Conditional Benefactor
OBJECT CLASS: KETER
---
SPECIAL CONTAINMENT PROCEDURES:
Physical containment of SCP-XXXX is not feasible due to its instantaneous teleportation capabilities, demonstrated immunity to physical damage, velocity exceeding the sound barrier, and ability to displace through solid matter. Control over the entity is maintained exclusively through **Emotional Keter Management Protocol (EK-5)**.
1. HOST MANAGEMENT: SCP-XXXX is conceptually contained within Containment Chamber Keter-Modified 02. On a daily rotating basis, a new D-Class subject with a confirmed history of severe negative emotional trauma (e.g., profound rage, depression, or grief) must be introduced into the Chamber to serve as a contract host.
2. HOSTILE ARMISTICE: The Foundation maintains this arrangement because SCP-XXXX tolerates it. The entity makes no active attempt to breach containment, as the Protocol provides a constant, controlled source of subjects for its self-proclaimed "study" of human moral corruption under power.
3. CREATED OBJECTS: Any objects, structures, living organisms (designated **SCP-XXXX-X**), or devices created by the entity during a contract must be immediately confiscated and isolated upon host termination. Created items are restricted to Foundation testing operations only.
---
DESCRIPTION:
SCP-XXXX is a sapient, conscious entity presenting as an anthropomorphic silhouette, approximately 187 cm in height. The entity is semi-transparent and covered by a dark, non-anomalous draping (a hooded mantle).
SCP-XXXX claims near-omniscience, possessing expertise in all human and non-human scientific and philosophical disciplines, enabling it to fulfill virtually any request. The entity's true intelligence far exceeds known human limits, though its conversational tone is often perceived as bureaucratic, arrogant, and occasionally dismissive.
MANIFESTATION: SCP-XXXX instantaneously manifests in the immediate proximity of human subjects experiencing an **acute, overwhelming negative emotional state**.
THE CONTRACT MECHANISM: Upon manifestation, SCP-XXXX initiates a formal contract, offering to fulfill all wishes until the entity deems the host "happy" or "satisfied." The underlying goal of SCP-XXXX is to observe and facilitate the moral corruption of its host through the granting of absolute power.
---
ADDENDUM XXXX.1: CONTRACTUAL LIMITS AND RISK PROTOCOLS
The following are the established absolute limits on SCP-XXXX's contractual compliance:
1. **CLAUSE I (SELF-TERMINATION):** Any wish requesting SCP-XXXX to cease its function or cause its own destruction is immediately nullified. This action triggers the instantaneous, hostile annihilation of the host (Protocol requires immediate remote termination of the host if a self-termination wish is attempted).
2. **CLAUSE II (CAUSALITY):** SCP-XXXX possesses the capability to alter major past events (e.g., erasing the invention of electricity). However, the entity points out the high causal risk to the host's timeline. **Note:** SCP-XXXX demonstrates the power to shield its current host from the paradoxical consequences of such changes, confirming its mastery over causality within the contract's bounds.
3. **CLAUSE III (HOST PROTECTION):** While the contract is active, SCP-XXXX physically protects its host from all external termination attempts, explicitly stating the host is "under my protection." This forces the Foundation to adhere to the Host Management Protocol rather than forceful intervention.
---
INTERVIEW LOG XXXX-A (Termination of Interview Subject Dr. ββββ)
[The level of danger, casual disregard, and capacity for world-ending scenarios demonstrated by SCP-XXXX are evidenced in the following transcription with the deceased researcher.]
D: - SCP-XXXX, I have a predetermined set of queries regarding the nature of the contract...
S: - Yes, yes. The tiresome preamble. I am a multi-versal entity who, by pure caprice, elected this universe to fulfill human desires at minimal cost, merely to observe the resultant havoc when a subject gains near-absolute power. Do not bore me, Doctor. Otherwise, you will be compelled to reclassify me as **Apollyon** when I host a gala event featuring every relevant SCP. And the Foundation, naturally, is invited to be the main course. (SCP-XXXX terminates its statement with an audible, resonant laugh.)
D: - Why do you fulfill these wishes with the stated precondition of subjective host happiness?
S: - Hmmm... That should be kept confidential, but I shall indulge you. (SCP-XXXX pauses for approximately 3 seconds)... I perform this function because... **I desire to, I have the capacity, and I am not restricted from doing so.** (SCP-XXXX instantly manifests an advanced pair of reflective eyewear, a container of carbonated beverage labeled 'Cola' in an unknown script, and an identical container next to the interviewer.) Go on, take a drink.
D: - (Researcher hesitates, then complies with the offer.) This is remarkably superior to our proprietary products. Where did you source this?
S: - The market for poisons.
D: - (Dr. ββββ begins seizing. Security is signaled.)
S: - (SCP-XXXX manifests a bag of popcorn and begins consumption, observing the researcher's final moments.)
Excerpts of note:
The following are the established absolute limits on SCP-XXXX's contractual compliance:
1. CLAUSE I (SELF-TERMINATION): Any wish requesting SCP-XXXX to cease its function or cause its own destruction is immediately nullified. This action triggers the instantaneous, hostile annihilation of the host (Protocol requires immediate remote termination of the host if a self-termination wish is attempted).
2. CLAUSE II (CAUSALITY): SCP-XXXX possesses the capability to alter major past events (e.g., erasing the invention of electricity). However, the entity points out the high causal risk to the host's timeline. Note: SCP-XXXX demonstrates the power to shield its current host from the paradoxical consequences of such changes, confirming its mastery over causality within the contract's bounds.
3. CLAUSE III (HOST PROTECTION): While the contract is active, SCP-XXXX physically protects its host from all external termination attempts, explicitly stating the host is "under my protection." This forces the Foundation to adhere to the Host Management Protocol rather than forceful intervention.
Compare with user's forum post:
Hello Lutranae Canadensis, thank you very much for the thoughtful critique!
Formatting: You are absolutely right. I will clean up the formatting using the Sandbox and will ensure the final draft adheres to all guidelines before I proceed.
Thematic Inconsistency: This is excellent feedback! I should have made this clearer: SCP-XXXX is not benevolent. The "minimal cost" is merely a demonstration of its power and a pretext for its true purpose. The entity's core motivation is arrogance, malice, and observing human moral corruption. The poisoning of the researcher was a deliberate act of contempt (boredom), demonstrating that the entity's whims override the Foundationβs authority, confirming its Keter status.
The "LolFoundation" Aspect: I will adjust the tone to ensure the entity's arrogance and disdain for the Foundation are portrayed clinically, rather than humorously, to reduce the "lol" feeling.
Thank you again for the feedback! I will start cleaning up the draft now.
- FromOtherWorld
Permanent ban implemented, PM sent, thread locked. Zoobeeny, Zyn, and Queerious supporting.