Noting that new site member Atraqlin (account age 1 day, site membership 23 hours) recently posted the following page, which has multiple indicators of AI-generation, to the Draft Critique forum: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-17056609/looking-for-some-constructive-criticism
I am not don't just yet so things will probly change. This is a revised version of the original I made.
SCP-8128
Object Class: Euclid
Special Containment Procedures
SCP-8128-1 is to be housed in a standard 4m×4m humanoid containment cell. Should the subject exhibit violent or resistant behavior, it is to be transferred to a 4m×4m high-security containment cell. The walls of this reinforced containment unit are to be constructed from 0.5m-thick concrete, reinforced with metal plating on both interior and exterior surfaces.
In the event of a containment breach attempt, SCP-8128-1 is to be subdued using non-lethal force and immediately returned to the high-security containment cell. Upon such an occurrence, Dr. Frank Rynalds is to be notified without delay and granted full operational command over the subject’s containment and management.
SCP-8128-2 is to be secured within a standard anomalous object containment unit located in the Site-43 Anomalous Item Vault.
Description
SCP-8128-1 is a Caucasian humanoid female, approximately 260 years of age, as per self-reported accounts. The subject exhibits snow-white hair and blood-red irises.
- **Height: 188 cm (6'2")
- **Weight: 81.6 kg
- Blood Type: AB- (Reference Physician Report 8128-A)
SCP-8128-1 possesses several anomalous attributes, including:
- Extreme strength
- Heightened sensory perception (sight, smell, hearing)
- Exceptional speed and agility
- Extreme intelligence
The full extent of these abilities is currently under investigation.
The subject has displayed periods of extreme hostility, often accompanied by recurring episodes of mental instability. These episodes are interspersed with extended periods of lucidity, lasting anywhere from several days to weeks. The prevailing hypothesis suggests that this instability stems from prolonged exposure to violent conflict over multiple centuries. Additional research is required.
Background
During interviews (Reference File No. 8128-1.17), SCP-8128-1 has claimed to have participated in at least a superficial capacity in every major war since the American Revolution.
At some point in the 1960s, the subject was diagnosed with dissociative identity disorder (DID) (Reference File No. 8128-1.17a). SCP-8128-1 has reported that a secondary personality, designated as SCP-8128-1-2 and referred to as “Minxy”, first manifested following the death of Sergeant Casey Mitford during the Tet Offensive (Reference File No. 8128-1.24).
On-site psychologist Dr. Frank Rynalds has provided the following assessment:
> "The subject exhibits extreme paranoia and aggression when SCP-8128-1 is the dominant personality. In contrast, SCP-8128-1-2 demonstrates no signs of paranoia or hostility, presenting instead as consistently calm and composed."
SCP-8128-1-2 is a distinct secondary personality within SCP-8128-1. This entity exhibits marked behavioral and functional differences from SCP-8128-1, including:
- A lack of paranoia or aggression
- A composed and analytical disposition
- Unique anomalous abilities
- Active camouflage
- The ability to phase through solid matter at will
Notably, when SCP-8128-1-2 assumes control of the shared body, the enhanced physical strength is not present how ever the speed and agility are increased.
SCP-8128-2 is an anomalous object that alters its appearance based on the background, experiences, and psychological state of the observer. Despite these variations, SCP-8128-2 always manifests in the form of a weapon. No additional anomalous effects have been documented.
SCP-8128-2 is currently secured within the Site-43 Anomalous Item Vault in a standard containment unit.
Interview Log 8128-1
Interviewer: Dr. Frank Rynalds
Date: 03/02/2003
Subject: SCP-8128-1
Location:Interview Room-04, Site-43
[BEGIN LOG]
Dr. Rynalds: This is Dr. Frank Rynalds, patient log #001 regarding SCP-8128-1 Subject is present and cooperative. Let’s begin. Would you please state your name for the record?
SCP-8128-1: My name is **Evelyn Akselsen.
Dr. Rynalds: Thank you, Evelyn. I’d like to start with some background information. Can you tell me where you’re from? Perhaps share a bit about your past occupations or experiences? Anything you’re comfortable with.
SCP-8128-1: I’m from a small town in Pennsylvania. It’s been so long, I don’t even remember the name anymore. [Subject pauses, looking up as if in thought before continuing.]
When the war started, I enlisted in the army. Had to lie, told them I was a man. If they had found out, they probably would have shot me for it… but they needed soldiers, so it was worth the risk. I don’t regret joining, but—[pauses briefly]—it was both the best and worst decision I ever made.
Dr. Rynalds: You’re referring to the American Revolutionary War, correct?
SCP-8128-1: Yes. [Long pause.] My God, that was so long ago… That was around the time I met—[subject abruptly stops speaking].
Dr. Rynalds:Met who?
SCP-8128-1: …I don’t want to talk about it.
Dr. Rynalds: That’s completely understandable. I won’t press the issue. My apologies if I made you uncomfortable. Is there anything else you’re willing to share?
SCP-8128-1:…Thank you for not pushing. And as for other things I could talk about—well, I have quite a few stories. If you want to hear them, that is.
Dr. Rynalds: I’d be very interested, Evelyn. Please, go ahead.
[The conversation continues for some time, during which SCP-8128-1 recounts various historical events and personal experiences. Subject appears to fluctuate between nostalgia and emotional detachment. Once the session concludes, SCP-8128-1 is escorted back to containment.]
Dr. Rynalds’ Closing Notes:
> Subject exhibits erratic behavioral patterns and notable psychological instability. While cooperative, there are clear signs of emotional detachment, trauma responses, and potential dissociative tendencies. Despite extended periods of lucidity, her paranoia and unpredictability make her a significant containment risk.
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> If even a fraction of the events she described are accurate, SCP-8128-1 possesses extensive combat experience and strategic expertise. Should containment measures fail, subduing her would require a highly coordinated response. Moving forward, we must proceed with extreme caution.
[END LOG]Excerpts of note:
SCP-8128-1 possesses several anomalous attributes, including:
- Extreme strength
- Heightened sensory perception (sight, smell, hearing)
- Exceptional speed and agility
- Extreme intelligenceThe full extent of these abilities is currently under investigation.
The subject has displayed periods of extreme hostility, often accompanied by recurring episodes of mental instability. These episodes are interspersed with extended periods of lucidity, lasting anywhere from several days to weeks. The prevailing hypothesis suggests that this instability stems from prolonged exposure to violent conflict over multiple centuries. Additional research is required.
Dr. Rynalds’ Closing Notes:
Subject exhibits erratic behavioral patterns and notable psychological instability. While cooperative, there are clear signs of emotional detachment, trauma responses, and potential dissociative tendencies. Despite extended periods of lucidity, her paranoia and unpredictability make her a significant containment risk.
If even a fraction of the events she described are accurate, SCP-8128-1 possesses extensive combat experience and strategic expertise. Should containment measures fail, subduing her would require a highly coordinated response. Moving forward, we must proceed with extreme caution.
Compare with preface text:
I am not don't just yet so things will probly change. This is a revised version of the original I made.
and thread description:
Also the reason the number is already there is because i had already posted it and was told to delete it and post it here for some criticism.
User has no sandbox history. Of note, the user had previously coldposted a self-written version of the above: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-8128
ITEM #: SCP-8128
OBJECT CLASS: Euclid
THREAT LEVEL: variable
SPECIAL CONTAINMENT PROCEDURES:
Scp-8128-1 is to be kept in a standard humanoid containment cell as long as scp-xxxx-1 exhibits no violent behavior.
If scp-8128-1 begins to exhibit violent behavior she is to be placed In a heavy containment zone and 13 armed guards are to be stationed outside of the containment chamber. If scp-8128-1 attempts to breach containment she is to be subdued and returned to the heavy containment cell until the on-site phycologist deems the subject fit to return to her cell.
Scp-8128-2 is to be kept in a glass display case in scp-8128-1's cell
Scp--2 is never to be farther than 300 meters from scp-8128-1
DESCRIPTION
Scp-8128-1 is a 6'2 caucasian humanoid female whose age is stated by the subject to be roughly 260 years placing her birth date about 20 years before the American Revolution. She has snow-white hair and ruby-red eyes. She has exhibited multiple anomalous characteristics including but not limited to shadow manipulation, extreme strength, heightened senses, extreme speed and agility as well as reaction time, and a heightened ability to absorb information. When speaking to researchers she has displayed open hostility at times that seems to be tied to some sort of mental illness(es) that most likely stem from multiple combat deployments and experiences. Scp-8128-1 has stated in interviews that she has had at least a surface-level participation in every major war since the American Revolution. At some point in the Vietnam war the subject had been afflicted with DID that according to the on-site physician seems to be combat-related the subject stated the second personality which from here on out will be referred to as scp-8128-1-2 or "minxy" as the subject refers to it started surfacing after losing her best friend in the Vietnam war.
After talking to the on-site phycologist the transcript was recorded and converted into a visual format(see ADDENDUM 8128-1) but the phycologist states that "the subject when scp-8128-1 is in control is extremely paranoid and untrusting as well as hostile at times. On the other hand, scp-8128-1-2 is extremely calm at all times."
Scp-8128-1-2 is the second personality from Scp-8128-1's DID. She varies wildly from Scp-8128-1 in the fact that she is extremely calm and collected at all times. She also varies in how the body's anomalous functions. When scp-8128-1-2 has control of the body she has the ability to actively camouflage herself and to phase through solid matter at will.
Scp-8128-2 is a cavalry saber. Carbon dating states that the sword is about 200 years old. This sword seems to have a calming effect on Scp-8128-1 when in close proximity and can be used to calm her out of a rage state according to scp-8128-1-2.
ADDENDUM 8128-1
<Begin Log>
Doctor Rynalds: This is Doctor Frank Rynalds patient log number 0001. This log is concerning scp-8218-1. Will the subject please state their name?
Scp-8128-1: my name is Evelyn Skinner.
Doctor Rynalds: so Evelynn can you tell me a little bit about Yourself like where you are from for starters or maybe what you have done for work? Anything helps.
Scp-8128-1:I'm from a small town in Virginia. It's been so long I don't remember the name of it.[subject pauses looking up before continuing] When the war started I joined up with the army. I had to lie and tell them I was a man. If they found out they probably would've just shot me for lying but they needed people to fight so it was worth the risk. I'm happy I joined up, but it was both the single greatest choice and worst choice I ever made.
Dr Rynalds: This is the revolutionary war we are talking about?
Scp-8128-1: yes.[pause] My god that was so long ago. That was about the time I met [subject stops talking abruptly].
Dr Rynalds: about the time you met who?
Scp-8128-1:I don't want to talk about it.
Dr. Rynalds: Evelyn I need you to tell me the foundation doesn't like it when secrets are kept from it. I'm trying to help you here but I can't if you don't cooperate. Please work with me here.
Scp-8128-1: [subject appears to be getting angry] When I start I care about your fucking foundation's wants I'll let you know. I'm not talking about her.
Dr. Rynalds: you will not speak to me in such a way Evelyn. Do not forget who has the power here.
Scp-8128-1: No, Dr. I think you need to remember! Don't forget I could kill you with my bare hands before anyone could react, And I will if you ask about her one more time! Don't test me dr.[subject goes limp in the chair before waking up seconds later]
Scp-8128-1-2:sorry about her. She is extremely touchy on that subject. She misses her. Oh that's right I haven't introduced myself yet, have I? I'm minxy. I'm the second person running around in this head.[subject taps forehead with finger].
Dr Rynalds: wait what? What do you mean second person wait never mind that what happened to Evelynn?
Scp-8128-1-2: wow wow calm down there Dr. [Subject raises hands in a placating gesture] Listen doc. In Vietnam eve saw some horrible things. She watched her best friend get ripped to shreds right in front of her. as you can imagine she ended up getting multiple mental illnesses including DID, and because of her DID I exist.
Dr Rynalds: so you mean to tell me that there are two personalities in your body? That's certainly interesting although I'm sure we've had other anomalies with similar things before.
Scp-8128-1-2:there ya go doc you got it.
Dr Rynalds: Oh shit ive got a meeting im sorry but It seems that's all we have time for today. Next time I would like to talk to both of you at once if that's at all possible.
Scp-8128-1-2: we will figure It out doc.[subject is led out by armed guards.]
Dr. Rynalds: I am going on file in saying that it is my opinion that the subject section should be put as Euclid due to the unpredictability and that we might be able to use her power for combat purposes.
<End Log>Excerpt for comparison:
Scp-8128-1-2: we will figure It out doc.[subject is led out by armed guards.]
Dr. Rynalds: I am going on file in saying that it is my opinion that the subject section should be put as Euclid due to the unpredictability and that we might be able to use her power for combat purposes.
Additionally, they posted the following comment:
https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-17056377/scp-8128#post-6844433 (reply to instruction, "I recommend taking this down, putting it on one of the draft pages, and getting advice on things like tone and formatting.")
Oh didn't know ow there was a draft page. My whole purpose for putting this on so early in the process was for advice on the scp. Thank you for your comment!
The author later blanked the page. Membership revoked, PM sent.