User Input Nutria has received a 24 hour ban from the IRC channel, #thecritters, for their consistent pestering of reviewers to critique their work, repeated ignoring or disregarding reviewer critique (multiple people have given them the same exact critique without significant changes to the draft), and generally wasting reviewer's time.
Mew. would you like to look at the changes to my article? I made sure to improve. http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/input-nutria
2:44 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I’m doing something right now
2:45 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok, lemme know when you're done.
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4:54 PM <RumenVerbin> The Lounge User
Is anyone here?
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4:57 PM <•Marcy> Marcelles_Raynes
Not right now it seems
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Slow day
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6:10 PM <Arkan1> The Lounge User
looking for someone to look over my greenlight post and my sandbox draft 1.2k words
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greenlight post: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-15622689/seeking-greenlight-frozen-over#post-5971032
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sandbox draft: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/arkan
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6:34 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Arkan1 no one's gonna look it's a slow day.
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It might take a while for someone to look.
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8:46 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
InputNutria: hi! After I finish eating I can finally look at your draft
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You just keep catching me at bad times
8:48 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
sorry
8:48 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
No it’s okay!
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8:49 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
Last night I wasn’t in a crit mood and you got me when I was eating and earlier I was doing craft stuff
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Just link it to me
8:49 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok
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http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/input-nutria
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8:57 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
alright, done eating, ill take a look now
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SCP-XXXX must be guarded by foundation field agents
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if it were just me, I'd list the exact mtf
9:00 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Well which MTF would guard it?
9:02 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
let me find the mtf list
9:02 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
k
9:02 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/task-forces
9:02 PM
here, look through this
9:02 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
k
9:03 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
SCP-XXXX is a middle school labeled Redmond middle school,
9:03 PM
id rephrase
9:03 PM
SCP-XXXX is Redmond Middle School located in Victoria, British Columbia, Canada.
9:04 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
K
9:04 PM
just let me find the perfect MTF
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which one would be appropriate?
9:06 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I dont know too much about mtfs, Id look through one that you think works
9:07 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok, I think the maz hatters are the ones to contain SCP-XXXX
9:07 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
alright
9:08 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok
9:08 PM
Now what?
9:11 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
sorry im jumping from here and discord since I was sorting some stuff out
9:11 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
K
9:11 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
getting back to your draft, apologies
9:12 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
K
9:12 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
will trigger an event inside it that causes it to release toxins of SCP-XXXX-1.
9:12 PM
id rephrase
9:12 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
?
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to what?
9:12 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
give me a moment
9:12 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok
9:12 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I cant rephrase in one second
9:13 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
sorry
9:13 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
hold on looking back,
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The school itself doesn't appear to possess any anomalous properties.
9:14 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok
9:14 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I wouldn't state this
9:14 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
The last people keep telling me to and not state this
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WHAT DO I DO
9:14 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
well I guess it depends on the individual
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which has been told to you more?
9:15 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
I've been told that since the gas comes from the school, the school is the main anomaly.
9:15 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
it is
9:15 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
on the other hand, the school doesn't do anything anomalous
9:15 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
the school is inherently anomalous
9:15 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
and on the other hand,
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at the end,
9:15 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
it doesnt, but it harbors an Anomaly
9:15 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
it's revealed the gas is anomalous because of the kid.
9:15 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I suppose you could keep that in if you'd like
9:15 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
the school itself didn't create the anomaly.
9:15 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
anyway, back to rephrasing
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yeah I see
9:16 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
That's like saying the hotel that stores scp-031 is scp-031
9:16 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
However, those who enter XXXX will trigger an event inside it that causes it to release a gas that causes those who are infected with it to sneeze uncontrollably (designated SCP-XXXX-1) [continue sentence]
9:16 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok
9:18 PM <•Marcy> Marcelles_Raynes
👁️
9:18 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Gtg now I ran out of time
9:18 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
oh okay
9:18 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
we can continue tomorrow.
Mars. wanna look at the newly updated SCP article? http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/input-nutria
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2:54 PM <Hydric> The Lounge User
seeking greenlight/crit: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-15610554/humanity-preserved#post-5965748
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seeking crit/review: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-15562481/hykjeberget-nature-reserve#post-5878294
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4:49 PM <CaesarKuznetsov> http://www.mibbit.com
good morning!
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anyone available to crit an idea article?
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5:08 PM <CaesarKuznetsov> http://www.mibbit.com
anyone available to crit an idea article?
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5:50 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
Paste a link to your thread and if anyone's around to check it out, they will
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6:42 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Hey Moo, wanna look at my sandbox article? http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/input-nutria
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7:17 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
You don't seem to have improved much. There's a lot of changes but the main problems are all still there, the dialogue is very expositional and the action description doesn't provide much of an atmosphere. The things seen in the school are just listed off with no importance given to them, and the characters also don't seem to react.
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7:20 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
Also I suggest you use some sort of grammar checking tool on this, there's a lot of wrong punctuation and missing capitals
7:22 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
I made sure to fix every grammar mistake, I even used grammarly.
7:24 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
There's a lot of apostrophes where they don't need to be and lowercase letters that should be capitalized
7:25 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok.
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7:30 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
Hey Mooagain would you mind looking at my draft once you're finished with Nutria's? It's 3.4k words. I mainly need help with dialogue and whether the mystery works (tab 2) https://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/ankleswallower
7:32 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Hey Moo, care to highlight the grammar mistakes I made? I made it so Flynn is more reactive like you said.
7:39 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
Anky I'm pretty sure Non-Euclidean just means not a flat surface
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InputNutria I don't really have time to do a full grammar check, I recommend you look for mistakes yourself
7:44 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok…
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I saved it though
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did you read to make sure I corrected some mistakes you noticed?
7:45 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
1. it's the best word for it 2. it just means going against euclidean principles which include spherical geometry afaik
7:47 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Ok I noticed some grammar errors I'm now fixing, thanks for the heads up Moo.
7:53 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I might post an article 2.3k if anyone wants a last minute look
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its about a foundation employee in a coma
7:54 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
I'll take a peep
7:54 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Hey Mew! Wanna look at the updated article? I made some grammar fixes. http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/input-nutria
7:54 PM
and a few changes.
7:55 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
Anky pretty sure Greek needs a capital G
7:55 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
good catch
7:57 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
I don't think redacted for brevity is the right term, I think it should be removed for brevity
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It's not like they're completely unavailable, just no on this page
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8:00 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
InputNutria: not rn
8:00 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
:( Ok.
8:00 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
Anky: me? Ty
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Sorry im eating
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http://kontainer.djkakt.us/the-price-of-glory
8:01 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
right, fixed it
8:05 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
Anky done reading now. This is a fine story. Unfortunately I don't really have much to say about it, I think it works well for what it's trying to do but there's not much here for me.
8:05 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
So personal preferences or do you have anything regarding the story?
8:06 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
I wasn't particularly invested in the stuff that was happening in the notes, but I just don't think journal entries are a good way to convey this sort of setting.
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The earlier bits with the exploration log were fun, but everything after that felt pretty neutral.
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It's not bad, but it's not good either.
8:07 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
funny, most people said they enjoyed the journals but were less interested in the exploration log
8:08 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
I suppose that comes down to personal taste
8:09 PM <Anky> The Lounge User
I might ask one more person before I post it
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Mew-ltiverse Just finished reading it, I liked it, definitely going to upvote it once you post it
8:11 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
thank you!
8:16 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Now do you wanna take a look mew? http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/input-nutria
8:17 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
not right now
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maybe tomorrow or later today
8:18 PM <•Mooagain> The Lounge User
InputNutria it hasn't even been 20 minutes, please stop pestering people who've already told you no.
8:18 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Sorry. :(
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Well you said not rn, and you finished with someone else. I thought you meant later today.
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Sorry, huge misunderstanding.
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8:19 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
I said not rn because I was a eating and b dont feel like it rn
8:19 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
srry
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8:19 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
pls forgive me
8:19 PM <•Mew-ltiverse> Basil Hallward Deserved Better
its fine
8:19 PM <InputNutria> The Lounge User
Thanks
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