[Jstaff, posting with permission from 
Riemann]
ChaosCodie (Wikidot user 1 day | Site member 11 hours) recently posted this thread to the Idea Critique Forums:
Created unbeknownst to man in the early 2010's; strafe the Earth accumulating water to fill its ambiguous form. Fueled by H20 never appearing to have a means of conclusion, it will be here long after us. Procreated from the essence of Death; born in the ethereal of dreams. Is on the easier side of containment. Only requiring a cup of water a day to satisfy it's foreboding thirst. Docile in the fact that SCP - 5868 own's a quarry. Not man; though it very well can be.. But to contaminate the fountain of youth! Physical description classified; so is SCP - 5868 'toxin' secreted from the bubbling of It's pours.
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The thread was staff posted by 
barredowl and 
MalyceGraves. Following this, the user joined #thecritters, to which I also informed them of the rules. The following occurred:
| 5:21 PM |
CodieChaos |
SCP staff I hope my alterations suffice |
| 5:22 PM |
@Riemann |
It would appear that you just took the original text |
| 5:22 PM |
@Riemann |
And split it into paragraphs unrelated to the elevator pitch, central narrative, or hook |
| 5:24 PM |
CodieChaos |
hmmm. what original text |
| 5:25 PM |
@Riemann |
The text from the previous edit of the post, that we can all see |
| 5:29 PM |
CodieChaos |
this is sourced from a sandbox. that is why you say it is just reformatted |
| 5:29 PM |
CodieChaos |
but good notes |
| 5:30 PM |
@Riemann |
Did you read the required reading for the forums? |
| 5:34 PM |
CodieChaos |
Thank you Riemann for your help to a more finished product |
| 5:39 PM |
CodieChaos |
hello! i'm trying to get a few more reveiwers for my SCP idea |
| 5:41 PM |
@Riemann |
CodieChaos: adding more formatting while not changing the text doesn't make this any clearer |
| 5:41 PM |
CodieChaos |
okay. |
| 5:41 PM |
CodieChaos |
could you communicate some confusion |
| 5:42 PM |
@Riemann |
Sure |
| 5:42 PM |
@Riemann |
I have no idea what you're trying to communicate in this post |
| 5:42 PM |
CodieChaos |
a demon esk scp |
| 5:42 PM |
CodieChaos |
a new one |
| 5:42 PM |
@Riemann |
there is something, and water is involved, but this isn't a coherent pitch |
| 5:43 PM |
CodieChaos |
Elevator pitch in bullet point |
| 5:45 PM |
CodieChaos |
water is involved like SCP - 173 eyesight is involved |
| 5:46 PM |
@Riemann |
Aight take a step back here |
| 5:46 PM |
CodieChaos |
I steadfast |
| 5:46 PM |
@Riemann |
There's a demon and water involved here |
| 5:46 PM |
CodieChaos |
yes |
| 5:47 PM |
@Riemann |
that's all I've got, you haven't explained anything else |
| 5:47 PM |
CodieChaos |
ik what to do |
| 5:47 PM |
@Riemann |
I just know that there are two disparate concepts here |
| 5:47 PM |
CodieChaos |
but what you dont know |
| 5:48 PM |
CodieChaos |
is a dream connects the two |
| 5:48 PM |
@Riemann |
Yes, and it's up to YOU to communicate that |
| 5:49 PM |
CodieChaos |
yerr formating takes time |
| 5:49 PM |
CodieChaos |
not to much in the lore but not to much out. hot and cold typa deal |
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The user also edited their post twice during this period, neither edits exhibiting particular clarity (with one edit linking a restricted google drive file). They may be a troll, or just colossally not getting it. Keep an eye on.
